Castle Paradox

lethal255 · Posted: Sun Sep 19, 2004 2:36 pm Post subject: My first Art work

As you can guess by the subject, this is my first picture that doesn't suk so bad i had to use a match to burn it off my hard disc.

comments welcome
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Uncommon · Posted: Sun Sep 19, 2004 5:00 pm Post subject:

His shoulder hurts my soul. As does his hand.
His feet look like they end in squares.
The strap on his his sword should have no slack, unless his sword is somehow weightless.
The shading is inconsistent with the wrinkles.

Jjkaybomb · Posted: Sun Sep 19, 2004 5:45 pm Post subject:

eww, he looks like...yuck. I agree with Uncommon on everything. And proportion wise, his head and hands are a little too big
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Velduanga · Posted: Sun Sep 19, 2004 7:03 pm Post subject:

Decent shading. But I have to agree, the proportions are off. Nice part is that the seperate parts are even to each other, but theyre not balanced to the rest of the body. His right fist doesnt look right either.
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Jack · **the fool** Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 773

he also looks as if he has a comb-over Ha ha ha!

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rpgspotKahn · Posted: Mon Sep 20, 2004 12:00 pm Post subject:

some definite improvement could be made.
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rpgspotkale · Posted: Mon Sep 20, 2004 10:32 pm Post subject:

No comment... Smokin'

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junahu · Posted: Tue Sep 21, 2004 2:47 am Post subject:

He kind of looks like a lego man, only not as good. Nothing seems to match and I really don't like those garish colours. But we know what the drawing is at least so that must count for something. Don't give up, you'll definately improve.
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LeRoy_Leo · Posted: Tue Sep 21, 2004 6:13 am Post subject:

The boots were the only part I liked. They look sort of 3D... ^-^
Improve it by making it more organic: Round it off a bit, and take the thick black outlines out. Unless you're going for the ironic boxy cartoony look. Indeed.
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Tsunamidog · Posted: Tue Sep 21, 2004 1:30 pm Post subject:

The hands and shoulders look kinda wierd....
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Setu_Firestorm · Posted: Wed Sep 22, 2004 5:18 am Post subject:

You know what though? If that is your first art attempt, then it's a great one. I mean shoot! Back in the day, I used to draw guns that looked like macaroni noodles in my old Spy Tech comic books. I think this pic is a wonderful place to start from.
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Calehay · Posted: Wed Sep 22, 2004 3:21 pm Post subject: Your picture

I must say, if this is the first artwork you find redeemable for your own purposes, then it is quite good and you are not like me (a perfectionist.)

General Comments:
I really don't like the chin. This I believe is partly due to the head shape. If you study other drawings or even people, heads tend to be more of a oval shape. (It's not an exact oval, but go with me here.) In "American" drawings, the chin tends to be more square. In "Anime" it tends to taper off a bit more to a point.
I truly don't like the folds, but I can't do folds either. To tell the truth, until you get the hang of folds, you can easily draw your pictures with "fake folds" (Ex. I'm sure you've seen a picture of cloth hanging.) And do that whenever something is hanging. It can make a nice picture.
Hands are really F***ing hard, just practice until you get the hang of it.
Proportions: Normally, the head tends to be 1/7 of the entire height. Here, it seems a bit more Super Deformed (1/5 of the head being height.) Unless of course you wanted it to be an SD picture.
You're hair is defying physics. This is mostly because you seem to be doing too much. I'm guessing this is an Anime inspired hair style.
You have a great idea of shading, however, your folds aren't reacting correctly with it.
I think the boots are fine, because they are just that, boots. They can end in squares easily.
Your arms are actually a little short. Since this guy looks gruff, it would seem that the shoulders would actually start "behind" the neck. You're curves are a little quick and square.
Your eyes (this is probably me) need more shines. I love shines and you only have that little speck.
You're hair is also not correct. This would be easier to explain if you had drawn ears on him. If you look at your self in the mirror, your hair does a curve thing infront of the ear and then, curves behind the ear. It's hard to explain, but that stuff to the right is never going to happen (unless he has a really bad hair cut.)

This is defintely a start. Keep drawing, as I will too, since my stuff is pretty ugly.
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TwinHamster · Posted: Wed Sep 22, 2004 3:52 pm Post subject:

Even if it does look a little like a block man... You have to respect the fact that it was drawn with six colors. I mean... It's not all that bad.

If this was an OHR character, it would look pretty decent with all the other block-human-heroes hanging around the game list.

Calahey:
I was going to quote your post, but it wouldn't have been of use.
-That is too long a review.

-You shouldn't be critisizing other people's works if you can't do any better. (Okay, maybe you can. But I've seen nothing to back it up.)

-Only coool people can do that. yeah three o's.

Coool... Smokin'

Edit: Okay, after reading the whole of Calahey's post, I should take back some of the stuffs *Okay, my post wasn't that hurtful if at all.*

Calehay · Posted: Wed Sep 22, 2004 3:54 pm Post subject: General Comments

I'm not saying that it's things that I can do better, it's things I've noticed from looking at artwork and trying to emulate them.

Edit: Well I think a long review is better than just giving small comments here and there.
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Uncommon · Posted: Wed Sep 22, 2004 5:11 pm Post subject:

TwinHamster, that is the stupid criticism I've ever seen. Review's can't be too long, as long as they're actually saying something, and, just because someone can't do something themselves, doesn't mean they don't know how it ought to be done.

Also, just to make your post completely invalid, look at the picture again. There's certainly more than 6 colors in that picture, asnd what is the merit of 6 colors anyway?