Castle Paradox

rpgspotKahn · Posted: Mon Nov 22, 2004 10:13 am Post subject: "Poetic Blood" - Voting

Ok. Finally the poetry contest is finished. Its taken such a long time, and for the amount of time an unfortunatly low amount of poems were submitted. (Thanks to all those that did)

The contest consisted of this picture:
http://setu.castleparadox.com/img/Poetic_Mourning.jpg
(Thanks to Setu for hosting it)

The contestants were required to write a poem using the mood and image formed from this picture. (Be it emotional or physical)

Here are the entries:

Jjkaybomb

Bent Hell

Black sky, turn to dawn
Turn to dawn it never comes
Black sky of ever night
Ever dawn that never comes
That swirls reality at it's door
The darkness comes to realize
It bends, it twists, it finds no right
The darkness realizes
That it is mixing and swirling
The chair, the tower, the trees
It burns reality for what it is
The man stands, the edge of his hell
And he stares, and the dark dawn
The dead realities, the darkened dawn
The chair, the tower, the trees
And feels himself bending with it
Bending with reality itself
He falls, so slowly
In the half dawn light that never came

RPGspOtkahn

Untitled

Oceans bend, skys wirl
People cry, landscapes curl
hear the screeches deep inside
loneliness, nothing in pride

Turf of winds, low stealth
poor to nothing, run to wealth
bend the time, eat the corner
shed a tear. Greet a morner

Towers strech, nothing gained
shackled, earth. Here we chained
No one thing, depression near
Live life, tear at fear.

Leonhart

Lost

When I regained my sight,
I felt little pain.
I was dressed in plain white.
The mood was insane.

The place, it looked so stern.
There was nothing to do.
In this place of auburn,
Will I meet who?

I ambled around
In the meadow of drought.
Loneliness abound.
True happiness I sought.

I finally found it.
A white tower sky-scraping.
I reclaimed my lost wit.
My emotion was changing.

It suddenly came back.
I was long dead and was missed.
But, confidence I lack.
I was about to deny this.

But, I hesitated.
I was looking for poise.
This is what is fated.
So, I had no true choice.

Death isn’t really the end of everything.
It’s the end of something, but it’s the beginning of a new thing.

It maybe full of strife outside
And full of dreary dread.
But there is a new life inside.
A warm, heavenly bed.

Leroy

Untitled

~Around the desolate winds blew
~Carrying ghosts swiftly and slowly
~Where did all the people go? No one knew
~Nothing exists. All is dank and lowly
~Now the shade is creeping quicker
~To your bedroom door…
~The nighttime fog is getting thicker…
~An icy breath freezes your core…
~A finger runs lightly down your back…
~You want to turn to see what is there
~But your soul feels a little slack
~You can feel the tangible scare
~You turn and without warning
~There is a creature so empty yet full of sorrow
~It’s blank white eyes full of mourning
~You doubt you will ever see the marrow…

May the voting commense.

*Vote in 1st, 2nd, 3rd and 4th format. Points assigned according to order.

LeRoy_Leo · Posted: Mon Nov 22, 2004 12:59 pm Post subject:

Since I am not sure whether votes are to be PMed or posted, I think I shall post.

GOLD: I would have to say that Leonhart's was the best. He had very interesting rhymes, and the description was quite captivating to me.

Honorable mention: I liked Jkbomb's as well. It sort of makes me laugh. The style is what is funny... It has sentence breaks, but little rhyme. Didn't quite enjoy it as much as Leon's because I prefer the way his ABAB style poem flows better.
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rpgspotKahn · Posted: Mon Nov 22, 2004 10:44 pm Post subject:

LeRoy_Leo · Posted: Tue Nov 23, 2004 5:59 am Post subject:

Ok. Woops.

1st: Leonhart
2nd: RPGSpotKahn
3rd: Jkbomb
4th: Leroy_Leo

I am the weakest link... And where the heck are the other voters here?
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rpgspotKahn · Posted: Tue Nov 23, 2004 8:33 am Post subject:

Lol. I think that everyone should HAVE TO vote themselves as last. Or just leave their name out.

Its easier.

1st : Leonhart
2nd : Leroy
3rd : Jjkaybomb
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Leonhart · Joined: 25 Feb 2004 Posts: 383 Location: Philippines

1st : rpgspotKahn (i love rhymes)
2nd : Leroy
3rd : Jjkaybomb
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Jack · **the fool** Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 773

1. Leonhart
2. Jjkaybomb
3. Leroy
4. RPGspotKahn
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Jjkaybomb · Posted: Mon Nov 29, 2004 12:43 pm Post subject:

someone's VOTING for me!

1.Leonheart
2.Rspotokahn
3.Jjkaybomb
4.Leroy Leo
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Sparoku · Posted: Wed Dec 01, 2004 7:30 pm Post subject:

Here are my votes:
1. Leonhart
2. RPGspotKahn
3. LeRoy_Leo
4. Jjkaybomb
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Jjkaybomb · Posted: Thu Dec 02, 2004 2:34 pm Post subject:

Pah. Noone appreciates freeverse.

Jack! I love you!
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