Castle Paradox

Oman · Joined: 17 Mar 2005 Posts: 16

This is the story I have plotted for a game of mine that has been deleted several times... Goshdarnit...
(This game will play like FFL2 for the GB, small world then transit to next small world.)
Anyways... Oman wakes up one day to a strange visitor, Bob The Clock. Bob the clock harries Oman into coming with him on a journey. Oman then agrees and heads out. Bob the Clock wants to go The Tower, supposedly what holds the world together. They head out and meet a strange red man made from lego's. He commands them to slay a fearsome ogre known only as... Cave Dave, and then he will let them access the tower from this plane. Oman and Bob do as they are told, and the red man takes them to the tower. He says he has business on another floor, so accompanies Oman and Bob. Once inside the tower, Bob disapears in a fight with a monster. The red man, whose name is Odin, senses a feeling of foreboeding evil. Oman shrugs. They continue on. They come to the second world which is inhabited by people resembling Odin, only different colors. Unfortunately, the world is a archipegalo of islands, and they need a boat. They happen across just the man, a pirate ironically named Cap'n. He was born Cap'n, raised Cap'n, the only Cap'n. Anyways, they befriend Cap'n and take his boat. They are attacked by a giant stereotypical sea monster, and kill it, only after being abducted by the pirates of Stereotypicalness. They escape, and make their way to the next level of Tower, where they ascend to Odin's world...

That's all I have for now, suggestions anyone? I'd appreciate them, or comments.
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Ssalamanderr · Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 6:36 pm Post subject:

Honestly, not to be mean or anything, but there is pretty much nothing that would make me play this game. There are a lot of games like this (with completely nonsensical plots and characters) and none of them are any good. If you are trying to make a funny game, it is best to have consistant setting and characters, but make them comical or include strange situations. The only way this could work is if it had amazing atmosphere, graphics, gameplay, etc. The plot just doesn't work. Try to create characters people can identify with.
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LeRoy_Leo · Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2005 10:03 am Post subject: Re: Quick runner along

Jjkaybomb · Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2005 10:12 am Post subject: ...yes...

It seems relitivly vauge, yet stable. It could go a number of ways there. You have my attention, divided as it is.
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Oman · Joined: 17 Mar 2005 Posts: 16

well. See here. The title of the post was "quick runner along" and that is just what this is, describing the story line does it no justice. I guess I'll have to upload the game so people can try it. But I try, I really do.
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Ssalamanderr · Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2005 6:50 pm Post subject:

Ok, thats fine. It just seems completely non-sensical to me. Could you please post more detail about the story then? Uploading the game would be great too.
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Jjkaybomb · Posted: Wed Mar 23, 2005 6:11 am Post subject: detail reeks!

The less detail you have, the more the story the story can adapt and change, so you don't work yourself into corners. A few more details may be helpful, but don't give us an outline of every single thing that's gonna happen.
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"However," replied the Universe, "This does not create in me a sense of obigation."
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