Castle Paradox

[Joe Man]

http://img60.exs.cx/img60/7492/nicolaslow2ae.png
http://img225.exs.cx/img225/1038/nicolas7dy.png

This is a character I'm using in one of the games I'm working on (which I plan on finishing in the distant future, because its a really big project). His name is Nicolas, and his family was killed, acording to the CSI, by his father, who commited suicide right after. The story is rather grim and a lot of people die, but I'm not giving any details as to the story.
As for the details of the picture, the gun a .45 caliber USP handgun with a laser sight, the jacket is a London Fog jacket of sorts, the pants are generic baggy jeans, the shoes are size 12W skater shoes, and the shirt is a generic t-shiirt with my signature on it. The hair is designed after the bad hair day of the n00b who came up with "Power Child," and the face was inspired by a girl with down syndrome, and is intentionally aesymmetrical. The character doesn't have down syndrome, of course, but I like the aforementioned girl's face.

I'll use this thread to post my artwork for that game. I won't tell about the story, but you will learn character backgrounds and eventually get an idea of the story, so there's no use in telling the story now.
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Last edited by Joe Man on Fri Dec 13, 1957 1:21 am; edited 2,892 time in total

[Uncommon]

The drawing's actually pretty good. Stylistic and iconic, albeit a little crooked. I don't, however, understand why you bothered putting the link for the same picture underneath, and a lot of the exposition you're givig on it is all rather long-winded and unnecessary.

[Iblis]

I think his legs should be a bit longer in comparison to his torso. It kinda looks like he's missing a neck. Aside from that, I quite like it. Good job.

[Moogle1]

He's leaning. Of course, maybe he's supposed to be.
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[Joe Man]

Aside from a few messed up strokes and scanning issues, almost everything was intentional, specifically anatomical details. The crookedness (including the bent over head conceling the neck) was a result of various grim events that more than justify the gun. I was going to make the legs longer, but the unusually compressed stature looked better for some reason I can't explain, and seemed to match the character more. I suppose it is related to my basing his face off that of a girl with down syndrome I've met, which is also explains why I felt it necessary to give him that aesymmetric look. All distortions are completely physical, by the way, and he will not have mental problems. But thanks for the critique, for I expect it to help me someday.

As for mistakes, I noticed the shoes were quite poorly done, and it looks like the ears are in completely out of whack positions (though they aren't. That's his hair). His legs are much thinner than they look, mainly because of the baggyness of his jeans. The logo on his shirt also wasn't supposed to be so bold in contrast to the general outline, but I'll fix that when I color it (yes, I'm going to color it). fortunately, I found it nice drawing this picture, as it turned out to be a good opportunity to learn to draw fabric, which has always been an issue with me.

By the way Unc, I wanted the picture critisized, not the post. Also, I like to put the URL under my pictures, though I'm not sure why. The second URL is the full size image.
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"Everyone has 200,000 bad drawings in them, the sooner you get them out the better."
~Charles Martin Jones

Last edited by Joe Man on Fri Dec 13, 1957 1:21 am; edited 2,892 time in total

[Joe Man]

And now, Adam:

http://img58.exs.cx/img58/1035/adamlow0pn.png
http://img201.exs.cx/img201/6248/adam9dj.png

I managed to lower the filesize a huge deal, so those with slow internet connection may even be able to view full.

I'm really not nearly as happy with this one, due to it's lack in quality. Its size on the paper was about half of the other one, so it isn't entirely a sudden burst of chronic laziness. Also, there were supposed to be mere concept scetches that were not originally intended to be in the game.

I won't go into detail now, maybe never, but I will exept (maybe even expect) detailed critiques on what exactly is wrong with the fabric, what parts of the body are in improper porportions, etc.
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"Everyone has 200,000 bad drawings in them, the sooner you get them out the better."
~Charles Martin Jones

Last edited by Joe Man on Fri Dec 13, 1957 1:21 am; edited 2,892 time in total

[Uncommon]

[Joe Man]

[Uncommon]

I certainly wouldn't call that a minute fault, kid. It messes with the whole picture, makes it look very uncomfortable and awkward. I realise that his shirt goes far past his waist, but the whole thing just looks too big. And it's still too wide, not his shoulders, his torso. Unless he was some weird growth on his left side that makes it bulge out like that, which I get the feeling he doesn't.

[Moogle1]

Plus, his right arm looks broken. Actually, know what? Try this. Replace his head with a grotesque monster head and see if that looks more fitting. If the answer is yes, consider re-drawing the whole thing.

(I'm more upset than I should be that your "Adam" picture is so ugly. You should rename him, too.)
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[Gizmog1]

Your Adam picture could use some work. For one thing, his feet, legs, and head are facing forward, but his torso is facing about 15 degrees or so the right. That makes him look twisted, and contorted. For seconds, there's absolutely nothing at all beneath the v shape in his shirt, no details or anything, and it makes it seem very tall, and void. Maybe if you shaded that in a little bit, or added some wrinkles. I liked your first drawing, but Adam needs a lot of work.