Castle Paradox

Joe Man · Last edited by Joe Man on Fri Dec 13, 1957 1:21 am; edited 2,892 time in total

Weird. I never really expected to start a band, but it turns out I can write weird songs well enough for people to want me to make a band and get a record deal. Odd, since I've only written one and a few halves songs, but everyone at my school wants me to go ahead and do it.

What's even weirder is that I might actually pull this off. As it turns out, one of my teachers (who, by the way, is the nicest and most awesome guy ever) happens to own three studios and likes making songs with his students, which is a category I fall under, and I'm also going to be working with him anyway because his class is writing a musical which we will perform in a few weeks, which gives me plenty of opportunities to get into this whole music business thing.

Anyways, here's the song which managed, somehow, to be very well liked among my teachers. It's a love song that starts out soft and compassionate and then gets a bit more hardcore by the chorus. I present: Bleeding.

Ssalamanderr · Posted: Wed Apr 20, 2005 4:46 pm Post subject:

Wow... That's er, odd. I like it! Happy

Some of the rhymes aren't that great (bed/head/dead, Rut/Pizza hut), but it's looks pretty funny. Vampires are always good. (of course Nazi Vampires are better, but it might be hard to put that in there now.

Anyways, good luck! I hope you get your record deal. I would buy it.
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Septimus · Posted: Fri Apr 22, 2005 3:25 am Post subject:

Dude it sounds good. one problem though
"and was the rock to stand (on)"
Is a rubbish line. Whats with the "on" in brackets man thats crap, other than the song looks decent.
Please tell me that songs not called "bleeding", way too corny. Dont let yourself fall into the "Look at those rockers pretending to be depressed" stereotype
Also what instruments have you got in your band?
I hate to sound pessimistic but in my school ive seen alot of bands come and go, make sure you dont lose the enthusiasm. Im in a band myself, were called Three pronged baldric, we got some quality songs and solid, enthusiastic and able band members, which is what you need man.
Sorry if i sounded like a bastard but what i said had to be said.
good luck
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Uncommon · Posted: Fri Apr 22, 2005 8:21 am Post subject:

You apparently missed the whole comedic flair behind the song.
On the other hand, if you actually call it "Bleeding" people'll write it off as some dumb angsty goth song and not even bother listening to it.

Setu_Firestorm · Posted: Fri Apr 22, 2005 12:01 pm Post subject:

True that. I can't wait to hear how this sounds.
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Joe Man · Posted: Sat Apr 23, 2005 9:02 pm Post subject:

Neither can I. I can't play (nor do I own) any rock instruments, so I need to find some way to get money for lessons and instuments.
As for the bad lyrics in the beginning, It's that way because I was lazy, it's supposed to be bad, and I don't know anything about love songs, or even love for that matter.

Anyhoo, I'm finishing up the next song, and I need Mormon jokes. I figured this would be a good place to look. Shadow?
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Gizmog1 · Posted: Sat Apr 23, 2005 11:41 pm Post subject:

Shadow's a mormon joke, alright.

(Nifty lyrics, I really can't think of much to add, except that I think calling it Bleeding is a fine idea. We've gotta start taking words back from the goths, they're all gonna kill themselves in a few years, and we need to make sure we don't lose any of our culture because of them.)